Sunday, August 26, 2012

Altered Perception

In slow time,
the colours of day
receded
further from
his mind's imagination,
painting out the scene.
Night left him
feeling out of place,
but aware
his body
was insubstantial, could fade
into nothingness,
as nightmares
combined to close ranks,
battalions
of grey ghosts
marching in hushed formation
towards the sunrise.

Inspired by Mag 132, with thanks to Tess & Andrew Wyeth.
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27 comments:

  1. Laurie KolpAugust 26, 2012 at 3:16 PM

    Ooh, Jinksy... this is great. I especially like the ending. = )

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  2. Irish GumboAugust 26, 2012 at 3:36 PM

    We become ghosts, mayhap, at night? And it is the light that brings us back. I think :)

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  3. GraceAugust 26, 2012 at 3:46 PM

    I like what you did here...blurring made it look ghostly and fading into nothingness ~

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  4. UnknownAugust 26, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    I love the image you've created and the words "battalions
    of grey ghosts marching in hushed formation" . Restless slumbers are difficult to deal with the following day. So imaginative, Jinksy! Thank you for sharing.

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  5. Brian MillerAugust 26, 2012 at 5:53 PM

    ha...i really like your closure jinksy...the ghosts marching toward the sunrise....i like what you did with the pic as well...it accentuates your words...

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  6. DaydreamerAugust 26, 2012 at 6:05 PM

    Oh...this is very different from you and, I like it. I love what you did with the picture and the ghosts marching, nightmares, all make it superb!

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  7. jabblogAugust 26, 2012 at 6:54 PM

    Altered perceptions, indeed - the sort that make one glad to wake up.

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  8. KayAugust 26, 2012 at 8:56 PM

    you hit it ...fade to nothingness...close to home for me today...xx

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  9. Kathe W.August 26, 2012 at 9:59 PM

    the altered image coupled with the last lines- wow- stellar poetry

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  10. Tess KincaidAugust 26, 2012 at 10:25 PM

    Ghostly goodness...

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  11. Wayne PitchkoAugust 26, 2012 at 11:39 PM

    indeed all very good....really like last line....thanks for sharing

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  12. izzyAugust 27, 2012 at 1:14 AM

    Painting out the scene- it is plenty dark in your rendition...
    but ultimately comes around to light again! thanks.

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  13. HelenAugust 27, 2012 at 4:22 PM

    This is awesome ...

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  14. imacAugust 27, 2012 at 5:18 PM

    As we travel thru time, in our time machine, all looks well and should be wall hung.

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  15. Susan AndersonAugust 28, 2012 at 12:37 AM

    Not sure which I liked most, the way you altered the image or the words you accompanied it with. Either way, this is a hit with me!

    =)

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  16. dsAugust 28, 2012 at 1:47 AM

    Wow. Just wonderful, Jinksy. Thank you.

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  17. hyperCRYPTICalAugust 28, 2012 at 7:35 AM

    Oh bravo! Brilliant write.

    Anna :o]

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  18. Little NellAugust 28, 2012 at 7:47 AM

    Bring on the sunrise - this sounds like an all too familiar restless night!

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  19. Dave KingAugust 28, 2012 at 9:42 AM

    That's life - gets you that way, don't it? love this.

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  20. Yvonne OsborneAugust 28, 2012 at 12:23 PM

    I like the grey ghosts marching in hushed formation. Cool take on the photo.

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  21. Silent Otto August 28, 2012 at 1:11 PM

    Wow Jinksy , indeed it sounds much like the travails of some forlorn recently departed earthbound spirit, cheers

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  22. SuzAugust 28, 2012 at 2:09 PM

    oh I loved this...Wyeth's thoughts perhaps

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  23. Tumblewords:August 28, 2012 at 11:41 PM

    The perfect 'blue hour'...

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  24. MargaretAugust 29, 2012 at 3:14 AM

    I like to think of ghosts bringing us back to the light.

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  25. Donna B.August 30, 2012 at 1:13 AM

    "battalions of grey ghosts".... I LOVE THAT Line!! I can always look forward to the new twist you always create....

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  26. ~T~September 1, 2012 at 8:23 PM

    Ooh, shivers...bring back the sunlight!

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  27. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2012 at 7:30 AM

    Your ghosts in grey will give way to morning, but when you're in the middle of them, it seems like eternity, no? Haunting poem, and NO pun intended. Strong! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/09/11/comes-the-revolution-for-riley/

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